Strange Bedfellows Chp01 Pg05

October 12th, 2009, 9:05 pm

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chickey, December 18th, 2009, 6:41 pm     Reply

Hey Jen, thanks for the suggestions. I wouldn't say at that time the French court was 'flourishing' (it was in debt, but despite that they still spent extravagantly). But your second sentence does explain what I meant better than what I have written up there; if I used it, would you mind? Thanks again!

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Jen (Guest), December 18th, 2009, 3:33 pm     Reply

Love the intro and love the picture of the court-- I remember watching you draw it!

Okay, the obnoxious inner-English student in me feels the need to point this out: 'The royal court lavished' isn't a proper sentence. I wonder if you mean 'the royal court flourished' ? or you could say 'the royals saw to it that the court was lavished with every comfort' or something. Sorry,not trying to annoying, but you did say to give comments... Hope that's not obnoxious of me to point out... can't wait to get to the soldiers...!

Jen (Guest), December 26th, 2009, 3:16 pm     Reply

Hey Carolyn! No, by all means use my sentence, though it's not very well-worded either... -.- I hope it wasn't annoying of me to point it out, I just thought it might be helpful... I'm loving the story!

James Birdsong (Guest), September 5th, 2010, 11:03 am     Reply